Eleanor's Dream [A Bioshock Sequel Fanfic]

[The_Noob]

Sounds like a good talk. I see two possible routes, considering your plot synopsis on the OP and those two lines:

1) (semi reasonable, perverted) Peter makes sweet, hot love to Eleanor, and she reacts horrifically to it, destroying Peter in the process, and forcing her to find someone to help her.

2) (likely) Peter tells her about someone who can help a person like her, since he knows his family's hospitality will run out soon. That man is Jack Wynand. Soon, Ellie gets sick with a strange disease, and she has to find him anyways, since he's the only doctor for 100+ miles.

[L33t B0uncer/R0sie]

Hey Crazy Demon, Can Some Of Us Forum-goers be In The Story? (Cameo Appearances, LOL Random Locals etc.)

(-All Up To You Of Course )

[Crazy Demon]

Hmm. I don't really know many people on these forums. What names would I put- l33t Bouncer? xD

[The_Noob]

Call me Nicholas DaFerron, Eqsuire. Or a bloody mess.

[L33t B0uncer/R0sie]

Hmm. I don't really know many people on these forums. What names would I put- l33t Bouncer? xD

LOL... Real/Fake Names

For Example:
I Could Be Officer Sullivan "Bouncer" Roddenberry....(The Local State Trooper)


Sullivan-Bioshock 1 Security Chief
Bouncer-Really....

[Crazy Demon]

I'll think about it. There are some places where I can insert "cameos", though they won't be any time soonish.

I'm going to need some cameo names tho

[Eleanor-Lamb]

Cameos Sound Fun!

How about Eliza Henridge (The High School Teacher)

[Daddy Is Strong!]

I'll think about it. There are some places where I can insert "cameos", though they won't be any time soonish.

I'm going to need some cameo names tho

If you want people to keep reading... CONTINUE OUR DEMANDS!

I want to be a strange poster that keeps showing up... it will be about "freeing the mind" (with a floating pair of hands)

*I didn't steal this for Other World! no sireeee!

[L33t B0uncer/R0sie]

I'm going to need some cameo names tho

Lol, The Community Has Amassed a Stock Full Of Usable Cameo Names

Call me Nicholas DaFerron, Eqsuire. Or a bloody mess.

I Could Be Officer Sullivan "Bouncer" Roddenberry....The State Trooper

I want to be a strange poster that keeps showing up... it will be about "freeing the mind" (with a floating pair of hands)

Cameos Sound Fun!

How about Eliza Henridge (The High School Teacher)

[Daddy Is Strong!]

Also - we are not putting pressure on ya... call it... a friendly donkey punch

[Handful O Hellfire]

Also - we are not putting pressure on ya... call it... a friendly donkey punch

Ha!

I will be known as a continually appearing line of grafitti which reads: "I AM C. PULLER'S SMOKING REVENGE!"

[The_Noob]

And I will pounce on Eleanor, naked, screaming three words:
"SPAAAAAAAAAARTAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!"
When finished:
"LEEEEEEROOOOY JENNKINS!"
And finally be destroyed by her Incinerate.

[Daddy Is Strong!]

Randomness aside - do what you can for us.. we will be happy with anything

_____

And I will pounce on Eleanor, naked, screaming three words:
"SPAAAAAAAAAARTAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!"
When finished:
"LEEEEEEROOOOY JENNKINS!"
And finally be destroyed by her Incinerate.

Daaaaaaayum! I laugh everytime I read a post from you

[domino29]

Awesome story! Keep em comin!

But could you not spoil the neutral ending? I'm on my neutral run-through and am at Fontaine's secret lab.

I hope this ends up being a popular, great forum story! I already love it!

[Crazy Demon]

Randomness aside - do what you can for us.. we will be happy with anything

I'll think of something ^^

But could you not spoil the neutral ending? I'm on my neutral run-through and am at Fontaine's secret lab.

I don't think I will be spoiling anything but I'll do my best to make sure I don't!

[Eleanor-Lamb]

I'll think of something ^^



I don't think I will be spoiling anything but I'll do my best to make sure I don't!

"When Can We Expect a New Chapter?"

[Crazy Demon]

Hey everyone, I added an index into the first post. I'm trying to read through Freefall (the prequel fic), but its so hard to sift through 56 pages of comments to find the chapter post.

So, to head off that problem (in case it occurs here), I've added a Table of Contents to the first post!

"When Can We Expect a New Chapter?"

Sometime this afternoon. I'm almost done with it!

[Daddy Is Strong!]

http://fanfiction.com

Max has Freefall on FanFiction Demon

You could read them there

[Crazy Demon]

Max has Freefall on FanFiction Demon

You could read them there

Ah, much easier now. Thanks.

[ZzBioSh0cKzZ]

great story so far

[Crazy Demon]

CHAPTER 5

She had been in the Family Study-Library when it had happened. Eleanor was engrossed with a political narrative that analyzed both the merits and flaws of objectivism and collectivism that Andrew Ryan and Lamb had believed in respectively. It was quite an interesting read, particularly as the writer was quite accurate about the flaws of each ideology- she had actually seen many of the flaws exemplified in Rapture! Such a shame that neither Ryan nor Lamb had read this book before they ripped Rapture apart.

Speaking of Rapture...Eleanor glanced down to the small red suitcase that held her Big Sister Armor. She hadn't let that it out of her sight once since she first came to the Appletons. The Appleton's had been slightly surprise by the possessive behavior but hadn't said anything about it. Eleanor was glad for this: she didn't want to have to explain why she was carrying a metal diving suit around to a bunch of surfacers. She still didn't know why she kept lugging the damn thing around, but something in the back of her head was ordering her to hold on to it.

Eleanor's heightened ears twitched as she heard footsteps approach, but she made no move to acknowledge them. She could tell from the pace and sound of the steps that it was the heavier, more muscular Peter. Once he realized she was in the room, he would turn and go somewhere else.

Today was different. Eleanor looked up as Peter knocked on the open door of the study. He looked incredibly nervous as he stood in the doorway to the study.

The two stared at each other for a moment.

"Hi there." Peter said, breaking the silence.

Eleanor closed to her feet and closed the book. Although she knew nothing about Surfacer custom, she was a quick study and had picked up a few things from observing how the Appleton family acted (particularly Mrs. Appleton).

"Hello Peter," She said warmly. "What can I do for you?" She flashed him a smile- Mrs. Appleton always smiled when she greeted someone and many members of the Cult of Rapture had complimented Eleanor that her smile was quite pretty.

Peter immediately felt weak in the knees. God damn, that smile was beautiful. Peter wondered if Eleanor knew just how radiant her smile was. With her pale face, it was like the parting of dark clouds as the sun came out. Her smile seem illuminate the room with warmth. In Peter's opinion, it was a good thing Eleanor didn't smile much otherwise he would have long since embarrassed himself by fainting or blurting out something stupid.

Except now he was embarrassing himself by standing around with his mouth open like a dumbstruck fool. "So uhMH..." He winced as his voice cracked slightly. "How has your stay with us been?"

"Very well, thank you very much. Your family is very kind. You and your brother are a lot of fun to be around. I think its interesting how similar the two of you are."

Peter always hated when people said that about he and his brother. He and his brother were complete opposites you idiots! ."Why don't bend over and let me show you how similar we really are?" Peter said.

To his pillow.

That night.

When he was absolutely sure no one would overhear him and report to Eleanor or his mom.

What he actually did was laugh (a little louder than necessary) and say, "Oh yeah we are! We're like two peas in a pod, my brother and I."

Eleanor raised an eyebrow. "Two peas...of the same pod?" She repeated slowly. The boys didn't look like peas. More like baby Brute Splicers. She mentally chuckled at the image of a miniaturized-sack of bulging muscles.

"Oh! I mean people think we look and act the same way".

Eleanor sat silently, mulling over that odd analogy. While there had been peas grown in Rapture, it along with many other plants had no longer been grown when the Civil War broke out. She had seen pictures of pea pods in various books though. It was almost impossible to tell the difference between two peas in a pod as they look almost exactly the same...Aw, thought Eleanor. Now the analogy much more sense.

Interesting.

Unfortunately while Eleanor was thinking deeply about the meaning of surfacer idioms, Peter's thoughts were on overdrive. Who could blame him? He was left standing around in an awkward silence, his nervous mind creating all sorts of crazy conclusions as he over-analyzed the situation. Man, he didn't know what was happening to him! He had planned to come here, engage Eleanor in some really interesting conversation to get her to open up (heh heh, open up. Mhm...). Instead, all he could think of was boring, engaging questions. If he didn't think of something fast, Eleanor would get bored and he would never be able to work up the nerve to talk to her again! It would be the end of the world! Quick, think of something interesting, think of something interesting, think of something interesting, think of -

"So, um, what happened to your family?"

Peter's mouth immediately dropped open in horror. Did he just ask that? He did! Oh God, why did he ask that? Of all the questions, why did he have the ask the one that brought up Eleanor's abandonment? Peter couldn't even begin to imagine the pain Eleanor must be feeling now. He was such a tool! "I'm sorry!" He sputtered. "I didn't mean- I shouldn't have-"

Ignorant to Peter's turmoil, Eleanor was simply confused. Why was Peter so afraid? She could feel the terror bleeding him off in waves. She was actually surprised that there hadn't been any question about her past before now. Was this another Surfacer custom? She clearly still had much to learn.

She tried to assuage him. "No, it's alright. They're dead."

To Eleanor's dismay, it seemed to have the opposite affect. Peter's face turned white and he started choking as half-formed words seemed to clog up his throat. Unsure what she did wrong, Eleanor decided to keep her mouth shut for now. It took a few minutes, but Peter was finally able to calm down.

"Wow, I'm really, really sorry," He said, his voice taking an almost pleading tone. "I really- I mean, I- it was stupid- I, look, I didn't mean to bring something like that up."

Again, Eleanor was completely confused. Why was he sorry? What had she said wrong now? There were still too many things Eleanor didn't know about when it came to surfacer customs. It was time to change this to a safer topic. Taking care to be as polite as possible, of course. "Sorry, can we talk about something else?"

Peter looked like a chicken as he quickly bobbled his head. Thank God for that exit. "Sure, what do you want to talk about?"

"Well...was there anything else you needed to ask me?"

Peter mentally bonked himself in the head. In his nervousness he had already forgotten the reason he had come and made a fool himself in front of Eleanor. He was seriously regretting his decision. If he could just go back and stop himself...

Well, he was already here now and Eleanor was looking at him expectantly. It was time to bite the bullet and man-up. He cleared his throat.

"Doyouwanttogotothebeach?"

Eleanor blinked. "Excuse me?"

Peter mentally slapped himself. He took a breath and said, "I just wanted to know if you, you know, maybe, like, umm, want to go with the beach? Maybe? With me?"

His voice faltered as he looked up at Eleanor with a despicably pitiful hopeful expression. Eleanor didn't notice though as she looked down at the closed book she had been reading. Go back to the sea? She had just left! Plus, there was still so much to study...

A negative rumble of disapproval seem to echo across the back of her mind, cutting off that line of thought. To swim, to feel the touch of ice, cold water on her skin again...yes, yes, something in her seem to say. She had been spending too much time coped up inside reading books. She should be outside on this beautiful day. She should be swimming.

And just when Peter was about to give up hope, Eleanor nodded. "Yes, I think its time for me to take a break. Let's go the beach Peter."

REALLY? Was Peter's immediately, silent -and completely undignified- reaction. He managed to catch himself though, and take on a "cool" nonchalant expression. "Alright babe," He said, ever the smooth talker. "Don't worry about the swimsuit. My ma's got a couple of her old suits from when she was a kid. They should be able to fit you." He winced at his carelessness and shot a nervous glance at Eleanor. His "kindness" could easily be misinterpreted as a underhanded ploy by a hormonal teenager to see Eleanor in a skimpy swimming suit.

(Which it totally was).

Luckily for Peter, Eleanor was oblivious. She was merely glad that Peter had been so thoughtful. She had no idea that the surfacers had special attire to be used when swimming! After all, if you wanted to take a swim in Rapture, you needed an pressurized diving suit otherwise you'd be crushed. "Thank you Peter! That's very kind of you." She exclaimed, mentally letting out a sigh of relief. That could have easily led to some hard-to-answer questions.

Score! Thought Peter, mentally high-fiving himself. "I'll go get the swimsuit then! Meet you in five!" He shouted, nearing tripping over himself in his excitement. He quickly left the room, crowing to himself in victory.

Eleanor smiled. What a nice guy.

CLICK HERE FOR CHAPTER 6

[The_Noob]

Pretty sweet. Loving the scene where he screams:

Peter always hated when people said that about he and his brother. He and his brother were complete opposites you idiots! ."Why don't bend over and let me show you how similar we really are?" Peter said.

Eleanor smiled. What a nice guy.

[domino29]

New chapter TODAY!!!!!!

NOW!!!!

[The_Noob]

^^
wtf? Some people are idiots............................

[domino29]

^^
wtf? Some people are idiots............................

Thats not nice!

Im asking for a new chapter because I like the story, and you have to insult me.
I dont like you now...

[The_Noob]

CrazyDemon can only do one a day, because writing requires a bit of a process. And "" smileys are not the way you ask for another chapter, my friend. Just wait.

[domino29]

CrazyDemon can only do one a day, because writing requires a bit of a process. And "" smileys are not the way you ask for another chapter, my friend. Just wait.

And going wtf and calling me an idiot is not a good way to tell me that.

Btw, it's called a joke. Deal with it.

[The_Noob]

'Scuse me man. Let's let bygones be bygones and see Eleanor in a sexy one piece.

[domino29]

'Scuse me man. Let's let bygones be bygones and see Eleanor in a sexy one piece.

Agreed
lol

[The_Noob]

Agreed
lol

It would be funny if she scares him by putting on a Big Sister suit.

[domino29]

It would be funny if she scares him by putting on a Big Sister suit.

Or accidently Winter Blasting him!

[The_Noob]

Or accidently Winter Blasting him!

It wouldn't make his boner any less hard.

[L33t B0uncer/R0sie]

It wouldn't make his boner any less hard.

This Might....Insect Swarm, mmmm...All Those Wasp's....

[The_Noob]

This Might....Insect Swarm, mmmm...All Those Wasp's....

It might, but it would only be temporary, but if she Electro Bolts him, he's obviously going to go into shock and ☺☺☺☺ all over her. That would be hillarious! Also, I had another thought, what if Jack married Tennenbaum when she reached topside. If Ellie meets Jack, it might be creepy to see him cuddling with Tennenbaum. Also, I'm not going to point out your poisonous insect fetish.

[Eleanor-Lamb]

Weird Conversation Much? >___>

[Crazy Demon]

Weird Conversation Much? >___>

I anticipated some perversion after that chapter. Swimsuits + Teenagers = fun times

[The_Noob]

I anticipated some perversion after that chapter. Swimsuits + Teenagers = fun times

I could 'nt stop laughing when you said that. Actually, it would be funny if Ellie puts on her BS suit to mess with Peter.

[AdjundantReflex]

Eleanor: I'm bored.
*accidentally electro-bolts ocean*
Random Bystander: AHHHHH!

[AdjundantReflex]

And I will pounce on Eleanor, naked, screaming three words:
"SPAAAAAAAAAARTAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!"
When finished:
"LEEEEEEROOOOY JENNKINS!"
And finally be destroyed by her Incinerate.

Actually, I'd be willing to bet that you would be destroyed by her Static Discharge before you could say "Leeroy."

[The_Noob]

Well, ever wondered where it comes from? Probably her ass or something, I'm not weird, but it's fun to mess up perverts.