My storys

[coffee009]

I made stories that i PMed Mari and both me and her liked them, so i'll share my storys to u form lovers, plz rate
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Mari meets new creature:
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One day Mari was walking around looking for items for Hector. Mari found a strange big daddy with a left arm Drill and right arm rivit gun. Mari coulden't take any chances,she sneaked past him and found a hypnotize big daddy and brought it to Hector. He made the hypnotize big daddy last perminently, so Mari found the strange big daddy again and chucked it at him, it was a direct hit on his chest, he then turned his lights green and helped Mari. He defended her as she kill the little sister,she went to Hector and told him her new discovery and showed him the big daddy, then a mad-houdini splicer ran up to Mari but she jumped onto the ceiling in time,the Cross-big daddy (now named Mr. Coffee) slamed the bad splicer into the wall with his drill then shot 8 rivits into his gut. Mari then went to the splicer,she asked him where Ryan was, he refused to awnser. So Mari sliced his head off,and found some of Ryan's paperwork in the splicer's pocket,and returned to Hector.
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Mr. Coffee impresses Mari:
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one day, Mari was walking with Mr. Coffee, wondering where he came from, she looked at it puzzled, it looked like a normal bouncer just with a rivit gun and a drill. Not much, but she wanted it to fight, luckly Mari met someone she hated, a man who used to rate her dancing skills poorly. She needed revenge, so she shot him and Mr. Coffee charged at him, and smacked him with his spinning drill. Then Mr. Coffee smacked him again, and got his drill through his stomach, as Mr. Coffee lifted him he let out a clip of rivits at the man, now gushing blood Mr. Coffee ripped him in half, then Mr. Coffee walked towards Mari (who was very impressed) covered in blood. Mari liked her new minion.
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Mari and Mr. Coffee kill stuff
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Mari was walking with Mr Coffee when she spotted a rosie. She wanted cash so she enraged it, it went for Mr. Coffee but Mr. Coffee reduced the rosie into nothing in a matter of seconds. Then a splicer threw a bomb at Mr. Coffee, it knocked him out, Mari threw a med kit at him so he can heal himself. Mari was mad, she charged at the splicer and started slashing his face like crazy. Blood and some organs flew in all directions. She was a great Dancer so it was a benifet when she faught. But she got shot in the knee. But luckily Mr. Coffee ran into the splicer and drilled him into a wall, then he healed Mari.
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Mr Coffee dies
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Mari and Mr. Coffee where greatly out numbered, then Mr. Coffee's thrown grnade hit a splicer, so they are helping the bouncers, it was fine by Mari, then Mr. Coffee's temper broke out, he growled, then charged at a splicer, and drilled his face, meanwhile Mari, was doing spin tactics, about 30 minutes of fighting and blood and guts flying, they took out the splicers, the other bouncers then walked off, then Andrew Ryan appeared, Mr. Coffee charged towards ryan, Mari cryed "Nooooooo!" Andrew Ryan then switched off Mr. Coffee's valve, killing him, Mari was full of anger she went for Andrew and took less then 5 minutes to kill him, ending the war.
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[smartalec5595]

I made stories that i PMed Mari and both me and her liked them, so i'll share my storys to u form lovers, plz rate
__________________________________________________ _________
Mari meets new creature:
__________________________________________________ _________
One day Mari was walking around looking for items for Hector,Mari found a strange big daddy with a left arm Drill and right arm rivit gun,Mari coulden't take any chances,she sneaked past him and found a hypnotize big daddy and brought it to Hector, who made the hypnotize big daddy last perminently, so Mari found the strange big daddy again and chucked it at him, it was a direct hit on his chest, he then turned his lights green and helped Mari, defending her as she kill the little sister,she went to Hector and told him her new discovery and showed him the big daddy, then a mad-houdini splicer ran up to Mari but she jumped onto the ceiling in time,the Cross-big daddy (now named Mr. Coffee) slamed the bad splicer into the wall with his drill then shot 8 rivits into his gut,Mari then went to the splicer,she asked him where Ryan was, he refused to awnser, so Mari sliced his head off,and found some of Ryan's paperwork in the splicer's pocket,and returned to Hector.
__________________________________________________ __________
Mr. Coffee impresses Mari:
__________________________________________________ __________
one day, Mari was walking with Mr. Coffee, wondering where he came from, she looked at it puzzled, it looked like a normal bouncer just with a rivit gun and a drill, not much, but she wanted it to fight, luckly Mari met someone she hated, a man who used to rate her dancing skills poorly, she needed revenge, so she shot him and Mr. Coffee charged at him, and smacked him with his spinning drill, then Mr. Coffee smacked him again, and got his drill through his stomach, as Mr. Coffee lifted him he let out a clip of rivits at the man, now gushing blood Mr. Coffee ripped him in half, then Mr. Coffee walked towards Mari (who was very impressed) covered in blood, Mari liked her new minion.
__________________________________________________ ____________
Mari and Mr. Coffee kill stuff
__________________________________________________ ____________
Mari was walking with Mr Coffee when she spotted a rosie ,she wanted cash so she enraged it, it went for Mr. Coffee but Mr. Coffee reduced the rosie into nothing in a matter of seconds, then a splicer threw a bomb at Mr. Coffee, it knocked him out, Mari threw a med kit at him so he can heal himself, Mari was mad, she charged at the splicer and started slashing his face like crazy, blood and some organs flew in all directions, she was a great Dancer so it was a benifet when she faught. But she got shot in the knee, but luckily Mr. Coffee ran into the splicer and drilled him into a wall, then he healed Mari.
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good story but re check the storie forum cuz theres a new big daddy in town....:rolleyes: :rolleyes: :rolleyes:

[coffee009]

hey im new 2 da forums and heres

my profile:

name: smartalec5595
sex:no thanks im under age :D:D:D
age:13
type:even better experimental big daddy than cofee
backround:born and abandoned at 2 smartalec, a child genius, decided to come to (insert city name here) to start a new life but being seen as weak because of his small body was used as a guinea pig for experiments to improve the big daddies as a result he is the biggest,fastest,strongest and smartest :D big daddy ever

How can it be better?

[smartalec5595]

How can it be better?

i have 4 words for you... RAPID FIRE RIVIT GUN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D :D :D :D

[BioShockWins]

This needs to be merged with the "Official Fan Fic Thread" in Off-Topic Discussion.
I don't have Off-Topic (General 2K) Mod sovereignty.

[coffee009]

my storys deal with bioshock tho

[smartalec5595]

my storys deal with bioshock tho

o thats the city the story takes place in?:confused:

[coffee009]

The game is called bioshock, the city is rapture

[smartalec5595]

The game is called bioshock, the city is rapture

oops srry noob mistake wasnt payin attention:o

[coffee009]

oops srry noob mistake wasnt payin attention:o

u get my intro PM?

[smartalec5595]

u get my intro PM?

ya but i no da game takes place in rapture but i ment in ur story

[BioShock Freak]

I REALLY like the story. :D I enjoy reading them very much. :)
~Mari.

[coffee009]

I REALLY like the story. :D I enjoy reading them very much. :)
~Mari.

thx, if i grow up, i might be a cook, or write storys, games are too advanced

[BioShock Freak]

Lol. Yeah. I want to be a poet. :) Well, I AM a poet. Maybe I should share some of mine with you. :)
~Mari.

[coffee009]

ok, i wanna hear some!

[BioShock Freak]

Wow, 200 posts. Congrats. :D

I sent you a couple. :)
~Mari.

[Atlas-Puppet]

Nice work Mr Coffee, I can almost imagine this as a collection of short storiesfor children, The Adventures Of Mr Coffee And Mari!

[coffee009]

Nice work Mr Coffee, I can almost imagine this as a collection of short storiesfor children, The Adventures Of Mr Coffee And Mari!

aient they a little bloody tho?

[BioShock Freak]

Lmao. Yeah, I think they're great but not for children.
~Mari.

[Atlas.]

Nice stories :) my only criticism would be that its all like one long sentence, try splitting it up more into sentences to help make it easier to read. I dont want to sound harsh or anything and make you stop, just an idea :)


I dont think that the likes of:
slashing his face like crazy, blood and some organs flew in all directions....drilled him into a wall

is entirely suitable for children's reading :D lol

[BioShock Freak]

I don't think children should be reading this anyway.
~Mari.

[coffee009]

...agreed...

[Atlas.]

well yeah i think the game is rated 18 for a reason ;) and since these stories are like that then it will have to be a no to children reading these :)

[coffee009]

Nice stories :) my only criticism would be that its all like one long sentence, try splitting it up more into sentences to help make it easier to read. I dont want to sound harsh or anything and make you stop, just an idea :)


sry, i type fast and forget little stuff like that Btw i fixed them

[smartalec5595]

I don't think children should be reading this anyway.
~Mari.

...agreed...

i dissagree...
children wither you belive it or not... have alot of stress and people they really really dislike (eg. teachers,parents, annoying forum members[not u 2 either:D)they can just imagine their a splicer their about to destroy and...poof stress and anger gone
:D :D :D

[coffee009]

i dissagree...
children wither you belive it or not... have alot of stress and people they really really dislike (eg. teachers,parents, annoying forum members[not u 2 either:D)they can just imagine their a splicer their about to destroy and...poof stress and anger gone
:D :D :D

i dont get it

[BioShock Freak]

i dont get it

Me neither. :confused::confused::confused:
That's why underagers shouldn't be in here. (No offense to you either smartalec)
~Mari.

[smartalec5595]

i dont get it

lets say you wer a kid and your teacher failed you on a test..
your playing bioshock and you imagine a splicer is your teacher and just like a punching bag...poof stress and anger gone
:D :D :D :D

[smartalec5595]

Me neither. :confused::confused::confused:
That's why underagers shouldn't be in here. (No offense to you either smartalec)
~Mari.

gggggggggggrrrrrrrrrr......:mad:

[BioShock Freak]

gggggggggggrrrrrrrrrr......:mad:

Like I said, no offense to you. I understand what you meant now. It DOES take a load off your chest when you picture someone you hate being a splicer. Don't get your panties all up in a bunch though Smartalec. Let's be cool about this. :)
~Mari.

[smartalec5595]

Like I said, no offense to you. I understand what you meant now. It DOES take a load off your chest when you picture someone you hate being a splicer. Don't get your panties all up in a bunch though Smartalec. Let's be cool about this. :)
~Mari.

uhhhhhhhhhhhh no panties...BOXERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:D :D :D

[FtRapture]

It is odd thats its an M rated game but the forum is mostly underage players. I don't really mind just seems like it is obvious that the rating system does little to no good.

[smartalec5595]

It is odd thats its an M rated game but the forum is mostly underage players. I don't really mind just seems like it is obvious that the rating system does little to no good.

same thing on this forum http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showthread.php?p=271015&posted=1#post271015

:D :D :D :D

[coffee009]

It is odd thats its an M rated game but the forum is mostly underage players. I don't really mind just seems like it is obvious that the rating system does little to no good.

Ya, hate ESRB, bioshock has sexual themes? i beat it and found none!

[smartalec5595]

what about the xxx eves garden in fort frolic (very scary place) and in arcadia u can find a AD about some 1 gettiing somtin 4 a STD just in case

[coffee009]

what????????

[smartalec5595]

what????????

what are you confused about? it said themes not the actual thing its sugestive

:D :D :D :D

[BioShock Freak]

what????????

There's sexual references, but never do we get to SEE anything sexual. I don't think it's anything to worry about. Censor-wise. But the violence, that's a whole different story.
~Mari.

[coffee009]

There's sexual references, but never do we get to SEE anything sexual. I don't think it's anything to worry about. Censor-wise. But the violence, that's a whole different story.
~Mari.

bioshock is fist pounding violance, no wonder its INTENSE violance :P

[BioShock Freak]

Yep yep.

Hi Coffee. :D You're online. :)
~Mari.

[coffee009]

yes i am :)

[BioShock Freak]

:) Any more stories?
~Mari.

[coffee009]

um...er...i'll pm u

[Atlas-Puppet]

Poor mr coffee.

[smartalec5595]

yea...:(

:D :D :D

[BioShock Freak]

:(:(:(:(
(Coffee, PM me the ending to your story.)
~Mari.

[smartalec5595]

ummmmm... excuse me you 2....
can i please be in your circle of pmed stories? i would like to c what coffee can come up with

:D :D :D :D

[BioShock Freak]

You'll have to ask him yourself. Sorreh.
~Mari.

[smartalec5595]

ok coffee....plez plez plez plez can i get sent your stories? i wanna c how creative you are

[coffee009]

erm
i dunno

[BioShock Freak]

Yeah, I think this is exclusive stuff Smartalec.There's a reason Private Message is PRIVATE. Sorreh.
~Mari.

[smartalec5595]

ok no problem i can be a constructive critic some times so if u need a cynical opinion.....pm em 2 me

:D :D :D :D

[coffee009]

Yeah, I think this is exclusive stuff Smartalec.There's a reason Private Message is PRIVATE. Sorreh.
~Mari.

gunna stick with mari

[FtRapture]

Are you two falling in L:eek: ve ♥ ????

Of course being one of the few girls here you probably feel like a glass of milk surrounded by hundreds of people eating cookies :D

[coffee009]

A whattawhatawhat?

[Dr. Locke]

WHOA! Whoa, whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa....... whoa. Am I missing out on something here?

[BioShock Freak]

ROFL. Well, there ARE a lot of guys here and I'm one of the few girls that actually talk a lot. I guess you can say I feel like that. :D
~Mari.

[coffee009]

Wow, mari is a girl? *faints*

[smartalec5595]

Are you two falling in L:eek: ve ♥ ????

Of course being one of the few girls here you probably feel like a glass of milk surrounded by hundreds of people eating cookies :D

nice metaphor

and funny coffee i didnt know mari was a girl either

:D :D

[BioShock Freak]

:eek:Coffee you didn't know I was a girl?! :eek:
Oh, C'mon, of COURSE I'm a girl. You guys haven't seen my pic on the member picture thread? :confused:
~Mari.

[smartalec5595]

lol sheesh mari im playin but seriously coffee you didnt know she wuz a girl :eek:

:D :D :D

[WrenchMaster]

Heh, we should've told him she was a girl AFTER he answered the love question.

[Dr. Locke]

:eek:Coffee you didn't know I was a girl?! :eek:
Oh, C'mon, of COURSE I'm a girl. You guys haven't seen my pic on the member picture thread? :confused:
~Mari.

HMPH! What member picture thread?????

[Atlas.]

HMPH! What member picture thread?????
this one ;)

http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showthread.php?t=15921


and i think coffee was joking, at least thats how it came across to me ;)

[BioShock Freak]

Here you go. That's me. :D

http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showthread.php?t=15921&page=10&highlight=Member+picture+thread

~Mari.

[coffee009]

Cant i just joke around?

[BioShock Freak]

Lol, I was sure you were joking. But I had to ask. Lol. :D
~Mari.

[coffee009]

You had to ask what, back on topic, what do you guys give my storys, outta 10?

[BioShock Freak]

^Nevermind.
~Mari.

[coffee009]

lol, Mari, i'm sorry. Forgive me?

[BioShock Freak]

Whoa, talk about a lost thread. Lol. That was a fun discussion though. Yeah Coffee, you're forgiven. Lol. Moving this to the BioShock off-topic. :)
So, whatever happened to your stories?
~Mari.

[coffee009]

I died, i can start more if u like.

[LookBehindU]

IS there an exhisting Bioshock rp somewhere in these forums?
If so could someone direct me to it?

[coffee009]

^ whats RP stand for?

[Atlas.]

RP = Role Play. There was one around but it died a long time ago. Don't remember seeing any other ones either...

[BioShock Freak]

IS there an exhisting Bioshock rp somewhere in these forums?
If so could someone direct me to it?

There's other forum boards that have some BioShock RP's. There's a few people that do it, though. Like Atlas, LeCount, Rose (she's not very active, though), and a few others. I started once a while ago with Rose, but he never continued it so it died.
~Mari.

[Cohen's Masterpiece]

lol, nice :D

[Bioshocking123]

There's other forum boards that have some BioShock RP's.

And what boards would these be?

[coffee009]

Why are we off topic?

[BioShock Freak]

Ok guys, back on topic. Coffee, do you have any new stories to share with us?
~Mari.

[coffee009]

Well, i thought of a good story regarding 2K and spambots

[smartalec5595]

i would LOVE to hear this one! (hmmm...maybe the forum kid geek can find a way around the spam bots...hmmmm...ILL FIX IT!)

[coffee009]

Well, i need 10 people who wanna be in the story, I want Mari as the main character, hope she says yes! Edit: If you want to, just PM me.