Eleanor's Dream [A Bioshock Sequel Fanfic]

[xXMkingXx]

It was built to replicate life above the surface

That wouldn't be right, why would andrew want to replicate something from the parasite? Nice idea though :)

I do wonder aren't the flashbacks gonna cause a problem, i mean eleanor still seems to have some flashbacks and as you might know in the first game jack also has a few flashbacks, so they could return and with all the flashbacking(xD) marie is gonna feel all left out and realizes that eleanor now has even more in common with jack and goes crazy and starts killing everyone with a wrench :)

[Eleanor-Lamb]

Spartan Suburbs: Originally Rapture's suburbia, this is a nightmare beyond all else, having been hit hardest by the war. Mothers cannibalized upon their own children, people spliced themselves beyond recognition. The ghosts here will give you nightmares, and the Splicers here were so bad that Ryan found it 'merciful' to lock the evil place forever.

Plutarch: The main hub of Rapture's free economy. This is where the Rapture Dollar was printed, and where Fontaine, Sinclair, and many others started their enterprises in Rapture.

:D
Some names -
Athena's Administration - (Description coming soon, But It's self explanatory! xD )

[Crazy Demon]

I do wonder aren't the flashbacks gonna cause a problem, i mean eleanor still seems to have some flashbacks and as you might know in the first game jack also has a few flashbacks, so they could return and with all the flashbacking(xD) marie is gonna feel all left out and realizes that eleanor now has even more in common with jack and goes crazy and starts killing everyone with a wrench

MY SECRET PLAN T.T

Thanks for the ideas everyone, I really appreciate :)

[Blade_Runner]

MY SECRET PLAN T.T

Thanks for the ideas everyone, I really appreciate :)

maybe you should add in Fort Frolic as well, i'd like to see that place again:p

[Crazy Demon]

maybe you should add in Fort Frolic as well, i'd like to see that place again

Right now I have this gap in the middle of Rapture where I know I want certain events to happen- I just don't know where. So I very well could put it in Fort Frolic.

Keep the ideas coming :)

[Blade_Runner]

alright, i updated my ideas:

Leviathan Shipyard- a shipyard/submarine yard where back in the early days, Ryan would get his imports and supplies from submarines and they would dock here to unload their cargo

Demeter's Agriculture- this is an Area in Arcadia where Rapture's agriculture would be grown and harvested

Pandora's Box- a night club infamous for its...well i think the name speaks for itself;)

Oranos Observatory- An observatory. (i have no idea if this observatory should be at the surface, or under water. thats the problem, if its at the surface, than it must be pretty tall, but if its under water, the it must have some sort of special powerful lense that will let it see through the ocean, through the surface and into space.

[pikimon]

Spartan Suburbs: Originally Rapture's suburbia, this is a nightmare beyond all else, having been hit hardest by the war. Mothers cannibalized upon their own children, people spliced themselves beyond recognition. The ghosts here will give you nightmares, and the Splicers here were so bad that Ryan found it 'merciful' to lock the evil place forever.

Plutarch: The main hub of Rapture's free economy. This is where the Rapture Dollar was printed, and where Fontaine, Sinclair, and many others started their enterprises in Rapture.

:D
Some names -
Athena's Administration - (Description coming soon, But It's self explanatory! xD )

I like the suburb idea sounds really innocent and dark at the same time :D

[domino29]

Dude (Dudette?), you are great at this! :D

Love Ellie's awesome attitude, gotta love the teenage boob scenes! :D
Anyway, cant wait for Jack to start having flashbacks, or seeing Andrew Ryan Zombie.

[Gin Ichimaru]

The Looking Glass:a large glass dome where the citisen could study the marien life and if possaple add some of those water splices we sure on The art of bioshock 2

[Pentrage]

The Looking Glass:a large glass dome where the citisen could study the marien life and if possaple add some of those water splices we sure on The art of bioshock 2

well i wouldn't want to see one like face to face but maybe a small glimpse like an easter egg. like say they enter this place and something quickly swishes by the windows, marie and elinor look around frightened but jack stares out into the blue with an emotionless face and says... "home sweet home, I hardly recognise her."

[xXMkingXx]

4days of horror how much longer are you gonna let us suffer :(

[Crazy Demon]

4days of horror how much longer are you gonna let us suffer

Sorry :( Trying to get it out before Tuesday because I KNOW I'll be playing SC2 all day at that time

[domino29]

Sorry :( Trying to get it out before Tuesday because I KNOW I'll be playing SC2 all day at that time

How about today cuz I lose my internet in 3 hours and Im going to

DIE

if I cant get ma crack :D

[Blade_Runner]

hopefully we got some great ideas down:D

[xXMkingXx]

Hah, just noticed this thread is getting close to getting both 100pages and 1000posts :eek:

[Gotz Van Buren]

Sorry :( Trying to get it out before Tuesday because I KNOW I'll be playing SC2 all day at that time

You and me both.

[BioChocked]

Terrans FTW... But sad to hear the story will be delayed.

[Crazy Demon]

With those words, the projection flew up and Rapture could be seen. Despite nearly a decade of war, decay and ocean pressure, the city was still looked as glorious as ever. Marie's eyes went wide as she moved closer to the window. She had seen the view once before, but she had only been a little girl- to her, this was the first she had ever seen such a spectable.

Behind her, Jack's eyes furrowed. He couldn't help but notice how many sections of the city had fallen to darkness. When last he had seen this, the city had been lit up like a christmas tree, shining in all its glory. Now, it was nothing more than blackened shapes that lay on the ocean bed.

For Eleanor, she felt only intense dread. Here was the city that had ruined both Father and her own life. Her was the city that she wished to escape and never return to. Here was the city that refused to let go of her life, that forever acted as her prision and cage. She was never going to escape was she?

Do not fear Eleanor, Delta whispered, pouring words of encouragement into her ear. Before you were weak and shackled. Now, you are strong and free. Before, we were seperated and apart. Now we are together, working as one. You will not be staying here for long.

Eleanor smiled, her fear decreased substantially. Thank you, Father.

"So Eleanor," Eleanor glanced up at Jack's voice, the porthole of her helmet shining brightly like a flashlight into Jack's face. Jack ignored it as he continued, "You said the last place you saw Tenebaum was at the Atlantic Train Station?"

It was actually Father who had seen Tenebaum, but that hardly mattered. Eleanor nodded.

"Well, I've never been there before. You're going to have to point out where I have to go."

"Oh!" Eleanor blinked, feeling slightly silly for assuming Jack would know where to go. She pointed out the window. "You see that area at the one o'clock position, with the two prongs? Take us there."

"I see it," Jack pushed forward with the bathysphere. "I'll just take us nice and ea-"

Jack was interrupted by loud beeping. For a second the inhabitants looked confused before Jack looked out the window and groaned- of course it couldn't be easy.

"Torpedo incoming!"

The girls were thrown off their feet as Jack immediately banked a hard right. The sphere shuddered as the torpedo exploded a few seconds later. The siren continued blaring- to the horror of the rescuers, dozens of torpedos were speeding towards them.

"Take the wheel Marie!" Jack shouted, leaping to the window. A nearby torpedo was diverted as Jack pushed it away with his plasmids. "Eleanor, we need to use our Telekenisis! If any of those torpedos hit, we're dead!"

Eleanor didn't need to be told twice, but she felt cold fear rush into her system. Stop countless torpedos from hitting them with Telekenisis? She was extremely proficient with Telekenisis, but Jack was asking her to do the impossible! Still, it was better than trying to do nothing. Eleanor reached within herself and began grabbing the torpedos and throwing them away. It was insanely difficult- not only were they moving at high speed, but in the dark ocean water, it was hard to see the missile until it was amost too late.

The results were clear as the torpedo explosions came closer and closer to the bathysphere. Sweat poured down Eleanor's brow and her head felt like it was going to split open from the intense concentration- she could feel a massive headache coming on.

BOOM!

The bathysphere rocked as a torpedo slipped past Eleanor's defense. It would have detonated on the ship hull if Jack hadn't managed to push it away in time. "Step your game up Eleanor!" He shouted. "I know you're stronger than this!"

"I'm trying!" Eleanor snapped. "Grabbing torpedos isn't easy for all of us, Jack!"

For a moment Jack held a look of complete confusion. Then he realized Eleanor's error. "Don't grab the torpedos themselves! Push the water around the torpedo to redirect it!"

Oh. Eleanor's face turned red with embarassment- God, she was such an idiot! No wonder Jack was superior to her. With those thoughts, she used her powerful telekenisis and began pushing the water. Instantly the number of close explosions began becoming less and less.

Jack gaped- he had forgotten how powerful Eleanor's plasmids were. Being a former Little Sister with excess ADAM certainlly had its benefits.

He quickly snapped out of his awe. "Marie, take us down to the city! Eleanor, keep it up we're almost there!"

The torpedoes were knocked away with ease- they were going to make it! Eleanor felt empowered with the water- it was so much easier to push the liquid rather than the torpedoes themselves. She was-

Swimming through the dark ocean, deeper than any man had gone before. The pressure was intense- even with her new experimental diving suit, she felt as if there were walls around her, closing in, trying to crush her. The suit barely protected her from the freezing temperatures- she had never felt this cold before. But even her muscles locked up and her fragile eyeballs ready to explode, she felt only excitement. For she had gone further than any before her, where no man she have ever been before.

The clearly man-made buildings lighting the sea floor in front of her said otherwise.

It was beautiful. The lights from the city seemed to light up the entire ocean floor. Towers soared high into the ocean floor, like underwater skyscrapers- or perhaps seascrapers was the better word? Eleanor didn't know and didn't care- today was definitely her lucky day. She already had the unique opportunity to to try out a new experimental diving suit designed to allow any man to go deeper than any man before. Now, with that very diving suit, she had discovered an unknown underwater city! This HAD to be the most amazing discovery for mankind!

A beeping noise tore Eleanor's awed gaze away from this unknown site. She was running out of air! If she wanted to make it back to the surface, she had to leave now.

But Eleanor made no move to go back, her curiosity holding her back. Why was there a city on the bottom of the sea? Was it even man-made? Could it be aliens! Or perhaps some other sentient earth species that humanity had never encountered before? No, this was her day. She NEEDED to find out now!

She was so buried in her thoughts that Eleanor didn't notice the danger until it was too late. Suddenly, her entire body was illuminated in light from behind. She turned to see what looked like a large metal…sphere hurling at her at high speeds. She only had a second to see a man behind a open glass window before the sphere smashed into her with a loud-

BOOM!

Eleanor was thrown off her feet as the bathysphere rocked from an explosion, a torpedo taking advantage of her inattention. Jack shouted in pain as her armor-covered body collided into Jack's fleshy skin, and the two were sent tumbling to their feet as the bathysphere shook violently. Only Marie remained standing, clinging onto the steering with all her might as the vessel spun out of control.

"Engines are blown!" Marie screamed, as Jack and Eleanor struggled to their feet. "I can't steer at all!"

Jack's eyes went wide as Rapture grew larger and larger, the window giving them a clear view of their collusion course. "Grab on to something!" Jack ordered, as he wrapped around Marie in a protective bear hug. "We're going in hard!"

CRASH!

The bathysphere slammed into the wall of a flamboyant gold building, sending vibrations to every building around it. The walls had no chance as the sphere hit the aging metal like a wrecking ball, breaking through with a loud crash. The sphere tumbled in a whirling ball of destruction, smashing everything in its way before finally come to a rumbling halt.

The Ryan family had returned to Rapture.

CLICK HERE FOR CHAPTER 29 (http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showpost.php?p=984211&postcount=851)

[xXMkingXx]

erm.....am i now having a huge ass deja-vu or did you post this before. Cuz i swear i already read this o_O'' i think my mind is ****ing with me

[Crazy Demon]

erm.....am i now having a huge ass deja-vu or did you post this before. Cuz i swear i already read this o_O'' i think my mind is ****ing with me

=_='

My mistake

[rchris48]

erm.....am i now having a huge ass deja-vu or did you post this before. Cuz i swear i already read this o_O'' i think my mind is ****ing with me

You and me both :D

[Crazy Demon]

You and me both

You guys are seeing things xP

[rchris48]

Wow!!

When can we expect more? Do you have an ETA on the next chapter?

Yeah, yeah, I know...give us an inch and we want a mile...:D

[xXMkingXx]

I can't wait, i want to know who shot torpedoes at them :eek:
All this story needs are pirates, ninjas and the companion cube and it is the best thing ever created. Next to the cake, but that was a lie :( (if u dont get it, go play portal)

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

MOAR!

yes I will say this after ever chapter....:D

[xXMkingXx]

MOAR!

yes I will say this after ever chapter....:D

we all will, for ever and ever(gonna be awkward after the last chapter)

[pikimon]

MOAR!

MOAR!!!!!!!

[xXMkingXx]

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWW(thats not a now its a no with w on the end)! Friday i'm gonna go to scotland on vacation for 9 days, that means i will miss atleast 1 chapter :'(

[rchris48]

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWW(thats not a now its a no with w on the end)! Friday i'm gonna go to scotland on vacation for 9 days, that means i will miss atleast 1 chapter :'(

I'll trade you, you stay home and I will go on vacation to Scotland :D

[Dr.BridgetteTenenbaum]

I'll trade you, you stay home and I will go on vacation to Scotland :D

Scotland is the best :D

[xXMkingXx]

I'll trade you, you stay home and I will go on vacation to Scotland :D

DEAL! you have to go with my mom my dad and my annoying little brother tho :D

[rchris48]

DEAL! you have to go with my mom my dad and my annoying little brother tho :D

Oh...what if I wrote you a sick note...would you still have to go?

Hey...will there be any updates this week?...Hello....Hello??!!!

I think, I need to join the ranks of MOAR PLEASE!!! :D

[domino29]

Back for the next coupla days....

First off:

YAY

Secondly:

MOAR

Thridly:

You, Crazy Demon, are now a celebrity!!!!! Congratulations!!!! We are your official papa-paparazi!!

[Crazy Demon]

You, Crazy Demon, are now a celebrity!!!!! Congratulations!!!! We are your official papa-paparazi!!

:O

I'm just satisfied with my SC2 :)

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[Crazy Demon]

26/30~ish missions completed. I'm a 100 percent completionist playing on the hardest difficulty ^^

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[xXMkingXx]

What is SC2?

[Kyntak]

Starcraft 2 I think.

[Daddy Is Strong!]

Look! he posted a chapter! its awesome! (on last page!)

Lies of hope...

[domino29]

You lying bastard!!!!!!!

You stay quiet with Stepha-fa-fa! DX

[Gotz Van Buren]

26/30~ish missions completed. I'm a 100 percent completionist playing on the hardest difficulty ^^

Hey congrats same here. Who you go with Tosh or Nova.


I went with the latter I liked the cut scenes and the TV.

Ipistol take a shot at life.

[domino29]

Please sur, can I have somemoar?

[Crazy Demon]

Hey congrats same here. Who you go with Tosh or Nova.

Nova because she was suppose to be in Starcraft Ghost and she reminded me of Kerrigan


Please sur, can I have somemoar?

On my second playthrough to see alternative mission D:

[Gotz Van Buren]

Nova because she was suppose to be in Starcraft Ghost and she reminded me of Kerrigan



On my second playthrough to see alternative mission D:

Same with both of your posts.

My dad being economical went with Tosh thinking about further conquest.

loved the ending sorry for Tychus Findley.

[Crazy Demon]

loved the ending sorry for Tychus Findley.

I didn't really like the ending. Too fairy tale-like...there wasn't any REAL sacrifice or tough decisions to make to get to that point. I kept expecting the Zeratul to show up and be all like "No Jim you can't cure her because we need her for the future" or something similar. Still, great game that I'm having fun playing again ^^

[Gotz Van Buren]

Well they needed her alive remember when zerutul told him that cuase if she was infested still she would be controlled by the xel naga. but by this she is somewhat sane except that she still has her hair thing. My guess is next pack will be her still controlling the zerg but she is more humane or something but in the end I could see jim dying

[domino29]

WTF did you just say? :confused:

[Gotz Van Buren]

SC2 lingo go play.

[domino29]

SC2 lingo go play.

Dont play MMO's.

Oh well. Zam cjiityy flagiboo!

See how you like it....

[Daddy Is Strong!]

You lying bastard!!!!!!!

You stay quiet with Stepha-fa-fa! DX
:P

Please sur, can I have somemoar?

Yes! pleeeease? I am oh so hungry ;_;

[rchris48]

Hey All!....

*walks out to the letter box*
Hum...nothing yet
*:( walks back into the houses closes the door*

[domino29]

*Removed By Precarious*

[Pentrage]

*POOF BE GONE*

o_o .............

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

*Glitter Magic!*

Poor kitten. Never saw it coming

[RaptureWillBeReborn]

*It's dream time Mr B*

What with Stapha who when? O.O

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

XD I like the quote changes precarious:D


Moar?

[Big D]

I've just lost track on where the forum went. More stories please, I know you're playing GTA and what-not. But your stories fill me of my boredom. I come here every 2 minutes just to check, then realise my failure. :(

[Pentrage]

well since nothing is going on I'll take this moment to address Big D:

your avatar: that game is awful

[Big D]

well since nothing is going on I'll take this moment to address Big D:

your avatar: that game is awful

O_O I havn't played it yet. It looks repetitive but the character is awsome :p

[Blade_Runner]

Crazy! put down GTA4 and make the next chapter! RAWR!

[pikimon]

I would give up my Firstborn for another chapter.

[Crazy Demon]

I would give up my Firstborn for another chapter.

Well, when you put it that way... >.>

Sorry there haven't been any new updates guys. Although I do have distractions (GTA + SC2 + work), a large part of the delay is plain simple lazyness on my part. D:

I will do better.

[Pentrage]

O_O I havn't played it yet. It looks repetitive but the character is awsome :p

just don't buy it, it'll make you cry.

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

Well, when you put it that way... >.>

Sorry there haven't been any new updates guys. Although I do have distractions (GTA + SC2 + work), a large part of the delay is plain simple lazyness on my part. D:

I will do better.

MOAR!
Please :3

[rchris48]

"So all we could do was to
Sit!
Sit!
Sit!
Sit!
And we did not like it.
Not one little bit." (Seuss)

[Daddy Is Strong!]

The updates slow...

The writer becomes busy.....

Soon this will end permanently in limbo......

Or not :D

[Crazy Demon]

The updates slow...

The writer becomes busy.....

Soon this will end permanently in limbo......

That's usually how most stories end don't they :( ?

[Daddy Is Strong!]

That's usually how most stories end don't they :( ?

Well.. most of the ones I love anyway </3

The heartbreak

[mehe]

I honestly still don't get how this counts as a forum game. I mean really.

Demon, I can honestly say your work is that of an amatuers. You don't incorporate many elements making it very predictable.

August fools!

Kidding, your work is impressive and i want more.

[Crazy Demon]

Demon, I can honestly say your work is that of an amatuers

The irony is that my works IS that of an amateur since the proper definition of amateur is someone who doesn't do something professionally ;)

[themaster]

The irony is that my works IS that of an amateur since the proper definition of amateur is someone who doesn't do something professionally ;)

I think your fanfic is very well written, and I don't usually read fanfics.
When will the next episode be done?

[rchris48]

I think your fanfic is very well written, and I don't usually read fanfics.
When will the next episode be done?

The second Tuesday this week, at a quarter past tomorrow, just before never :(

[NuclearCupcake]

I think your right =(
Please post soon we're dying here!
Playing StarcraftII is understandable as an excuse but sso MANY more games are coming out from september onwards :O You gotta hurry before they distract yu and us all

[pikimon]

MOAR MOAR MOAR MOAR

[RaptureWillBeReborn]

MOAR MOAR MOAR MOAR

That's what she said.:)

But I agree with you... post more fanfic damnit!

[domino29]

Crazy, have you ever seen Indiana Jones? Y'know the part where the dudes face melts.... ya well.... hurry up.... :cool:

[xXMkingXx]

I'm back from scotland, and there is still no new chapter....You know i had to cry myself to sleep everynight(cuz i had no pc in scotland so i couldn't check for a new chapter) with the little comfort that when i come home to my pc there will be a new chapter. I feel like comitting suicide now...

[Crazy Demon]

You know i had to cry myself to sleep everynight(cuz i had no pc in scotland so i couldn't check for a new chapter) with the little comfort that when i come home to my pc there will be a new chapter. I feel like comitting suicide now...

Let's not go too overboard =_='

[domino29]

Crazy, have you ever seen Liscence to Kill? Y'know the part where the guy goes into a Pressure Room and explodes.... ya well..... hurry up.... :cool:

[Crazy Demon]

Crazy, have you ever seen Liscence to Kill? Y'know the part where the guy goes into a Pressure Room and explodes.... ya well..... hurry up....

Sorry guys :( . I actually have been writing but I keep getting fustrated with how it turns out (writers block?). I might just do a bull rush to the end of this story since I want to finish it before the semester starts.

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

Sorry guys :( . I actually have been writing but I keep getting fustrated with how it turns out (writers block?). I might just do a bull rush to the end of this story since I want to finish it before the semester starts.

..........
*twitches*

MOAR!

[domino29]

Crazy, have you ever seen.... y'know what, I'll just skip to the end....

If you bull **** the end of the story, Im gonna kill you, now hurry up and get to that sinking sub, Ellie, Jack, and Marie are waiting....

[Crazy Demon]

If you bull **** the end of the story, Im gonna kill you, now hurry up and get to that sinking sub, Ellie, Jack, and Marie are waiting....

Chapter 29

They went down to Rapture. They died.

The End.

Like that? ;)

[Blade_Runner]

Chapter 29

They went down to Rapture. They died.

The End.

Like that? ;)

nooOOOoooo. not like that

[domino29]

Bravo Crazy, you just killed your life.....


Ah-nold Voice:
IT'S TIME TO BE TERMINATED!!!

[xXMkingXx]

We want MOARRRRRRRRRRE >:(

[rchris48]

....and then Eleanor awoke. When she opened her eyes she saw, standing around her bed, the Tin Man, Scarecrow, the Lion and Michael Jackson with smiles on their faces and tears in their eyes.

The End

[domino29]

THAT, is an ending. You could learn from him Crazy.

Now actually START WRITTING!!!!!!!!!!!

Girrrrrrrrr

[xXMkingXx]

The crowd is getting angry demon, you better start releasing MOAR chapters or we start shooting torpedo's at you >:(

[Daddy Is Strong!]

Chapter 29

They went down to Rapture. They died.

The End.

Like that? ;)

That battle between Zombie Delta and Robo Jack was awesome

[pikimon]

The crowd is getting angry demon, you better start releasing MOAR chapters or we start shooting torpedo's at you >:(

Start sharpening the pitchforks :D

Oh and

MOAR MOAR MOAR

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

That battle between Zombie Delta and Robo Jack was awesome

Haha I knew I liked your sense of humor

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

Any MOAR yet?.....no? ok then *shoots crazy demon*

[Blade_Runner]

uuugggghhhhhh, this is rediculous

[Crazy Demon]

uuugggghhhhhh, this is rediculous

Actually, Operation BullRush is working pretty good. I should have a new chapter up later today.

[Blade_Runner]

Actually, Operation BullRush is working pretty good. I should have a new chapter up later today.

yay woot! new chapter!:D

[domino29]

OMG!!!!!

Imma happy little fangir-.... I mean fanboy..... :cool:

[Dr.BridgetteTenenbaum]

Actually, Operation BullRush is working pretty good. I should have a new chapter up later today.

Thank JEBUS

[rchris48]

Actually, Operation BullRush is working pretty good. I should have a new chapter up later today.

Well... I guess we could stay for another drink and maybe a little dessert...deal me back in *wink*.

"Earl turn the car off and hang our coats back up, We're staying".

[Crazy Demon]

Chapter 29

Eleanor was the first to regain conciousness, her Big Sister suit having protected her from the majority of damage recieved in the collision. She stirred sluggishly, blinking wearily inside her helmet. It was pitch black- she could barely make out vague shapes with her enhanced vision.

What happened? She thought sluggishly, still out of it. She could feel a massive headache coming on- something she hoped that was caused by the collision and not from...other sources.

One of the torpedos slipped through your defense and hit our bathysphere. We have crashed landed in Rapture.

Where are we? Eleanor tried to shake the cobwebs out of her head with no success.

Before Delta could respond, there was a loud crack as Jack lit a flare. Eleanor flinched as the bathysphere was instantly flooded with light. Besides her, Marie laid sprawled on the ground. She had a dazed look on her face, but for someone without any gene tonic upgrades she was relatively untouched despite the magnitude of the crash.

Jack, on the other hand, was in far worse shape. His protective bear hug around Marie had caused multiple, deep gashes across his back and arms. A large purple bruise was already forming around his face, his armor shell tonics only doing so much to lessen the damage. His eyes were sharp though as he lifted the flare up and took in the situation.

"Is everyone alright?" Asked Jack. His focused gaze was completely at odds with his disshelved state.

"[Jebus] Dad!" Marie pulled herself to her feet, her face red with anger and...shame? "What were you thinking? You look like complete **** now!"

Jack ignored her as the teen pulled out a medi-kit and began to heal his wounds. "Eleanor, what is our supply situation?"

Eleanor quickly glanced at their storage. Everything in the bathysphere that wasn't nailed down had been thrown about in a chaotic mess. Surprisingly, almost all of their supplies were in good condition. "We may have lost some of our food, but we're good to go with our weapons and ammo."

Most of the cuts had been healed and the massive bruise had been reduced to small bump thanks the wonders of Rapture medicine. Jack gestured his thanks to Marie as he cast a critical eye on their bathysphere. It had absolutely shredded by the explosive force of the torpedos, almost to the point that it looked like a split potato. Honestly, it was a miracle they had managed to land in Rapture alive and relatively unharmed at all.

"What happened?" Jack asked. "Why were all those torpedos shot at us?"

Eleanor glanced at Jack, her fingers curling nervously. "Those were the automated defense systems of Rapture. The whole city must have gone on lockdown when Lamb was killed. Anything going in bound or out bound of the city will be shot down."

"What?" Marie cried, vocalizing the thoughts they were all thinking. "You mean we're stuck here?"

"Quiet!" Eleanor hissed. "There could be splicers nearby."

Jack sighed, taking command. "While this lockdown complicates things, it wasn't unexpected. We always knew it would be harder leaving Rpature than entering. This doesn't change our mission, understood?."

As the girls voiced there confirmation, Jack pulled out his tommy gun and loaded it. "Let's move out then. Keep your eyes peeled- we've made a lot of noise. That ought to attract any splicers in the area."

Marie nodded, her fingers curled tightly around her crossbow. Eleanor was curious to see a nervous look on the Hispanic girl's face that was completely at odds with her boisterous attitude. In fact, Eleanor realized it was the first time she had anything besides anger on her face since they had left the surface.

Not so superior now that you're actually here are you? Thought Eleanor as she smiled smugly behind her helmet.

The three rescuers stepped out of the bathysphere, taking the room around them. The place was pitchblack but a combination of flares, flashlights, a Big Sister diving suit light and Eleanor's ignite plasmid chased the darkness away and revealed the area.

They were in a large room. At one point it must have been some kind of grand ball room or other fancy area. Fragments of faded red carpet lay scatter around the ground. Massive windows were placed along the walls, giving a beautiful view of the city. The ripped remains of regal purple drapes hanged like dirty laundry over the window frames. In the middle of the room was a magnificent gold statue. It was in pristine condition, with the exception that its head was missing. It looked someone had grabbed it and brutally ripped it off.

"Where are we?" Marie asked. Her voice was at a slightly higher pitch than normal.

At Jack's expectant glance, Eleanor spoke- images and maps flashed into her mind and she now recognized where they were. "I'm not completely sure, but I believe we are in the Guild homes of Rapture. These were the homes were where the skilled specialist lived together, often in guilds. Plumbers, cooks, welders- they weren't necessarily rich but they were the part of the "best of the best" that Ryan strived to bring to Rapture. Most of these guilds those were not part of Ryan's inner circle lived which is probably why he put them here. For the most part this area is cut off from the rest of Rapture, so we'll have to take a bathysphere back into Rapture. Luckily, almost all of these houses have private bathyspheres, so it will be a simple matter of finding one."

Jack frowned. "I thought that only Ryan's inner circle could use the bathyspheres. That's was one of the reasons why Fontaine needed me to kill Ryan."

Eleanor smiled, though Jack couldn't see it through her helmet. She liked when Jack asked her questions- for once, she was glad that Lamb had made her "study" (read: forced the knowledge into her brain) the relatively-short history of Rapture. "That was only after the civil war Jack. And when Lamb took power, she allowed only the Big Sisters access to the bathyspheres as well."

"So I wouldn't be able to use the bathysphere system at all anymore?"

Eleanor paused as a memory from Father flashed into her head, a young man's excited voice speaking into her ear.

All right, Diary - last entry! ... Lizzy and I ... we found a 'sphere and we're going home! Ain't that right, baby? Next stop, topside!

"Not anymore," Replied Eleanor shaking her head. "After some failed escape attempts from the relatives of Ryan's inner circle, Lamb closed off all bathysphere access except to those with Big Sister suits."

"So which way are the apartments?"

"That way." Eleanor pointed at an elevator on the east side of the room. "But it won't do us any good to go now. All apartments are sealed by a code. We're going to need to grab one before we can get out of here." She paused as she brought up what she could remember of the map schematics in her mind. "There should be interrogation rooms in that direction," She pointed at a long, dimly-lit hallway on the north side of the room. "There might be some kind of computer system we can hack there. If any place would have people's private information, why not the police force of this area?"

"Can we get a move on?" Marie interrupted, her eyes darting around as if expecting to get jumped at any second. "This place is giving me the creeps."

Jack said nothing as he gestured for Eleanor to take point. With her Big Sister armor and regeneration, she was the perfect vanguard. Marie quickly fell in step behind her with Jack coming in from the rear, ever watchful of their surroundings.

CLICK HERE FOR CHAPTER 30 (POST 1) (http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1043890&postcount=938)

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

New chapter :D

[Blade_Runner]

WOOT!

10char

[xXMkingXx]

I read this while playing some bioshock ost's from youtube in the background........amazing. I hope we wont have to wait to long for the next chapter this one felt kinda....short.

To make it easier i FORBID you, crazy demon, do to anything else but go to bathroom, eat, sleep and WRITE >:D *insert evil laugh here*

[Blade_Runner]

I read this while playing some bioshock ost's from youtube in the background........amazing. I hope we wont have to wait to long for the next chapter this one felt kinda....short.

To make it easier i FORBID you, crazy demon, do to anything else but go to bathroom, eat, sleep and WRITE >:D MUA HA HA HA HA HA!!!!*

there you go :)

[Daddy Is Strong!]

Good Crazy!

We were about to go crazy if you didn't hurry up :D

[Kyntak]

Nice, a new chapter :D

[pikimon]

Awesome Chapter love the idea of a guild, I wonder what kind of people lived in that particular guild?

[domino29]

I must say Crazy, you've done it again. :D















Now can we have sum moar please?

[xXMkingXx]

Since i like editing and there is no chapter to feed my addiction for this fanfic i made a trailer-teaser-ish-video-thing: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sjlz9hb6XQ0
:D

[RaptureWillBeReborn]

I need moar.... NOW! :p ;)

[Crazy Demon]

Awesome Chapter love the idea of a guild, I wonder what kind of people lived in that particular guild?


You shall see some familiar faces in the next chapters ;)


Since i like editing and there is no chapter to feed my addiction for this fanfic i made a trailer-teaser-ish-video-thing: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sjlz9hb6XQ0


Dang at work can't watch it :(

[domino29]

Just so ****INGS amazing MKing! :D

<3

[xXMkingXx]

Just so ****INGS amazing MKing! :D

<3

:D ty

-10char

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

Please sur cn I haz sum moar?

[Crazy Demon]

Since i like editing and there is no chapter to feed my addiction for this fanfic i made a trailer-teaser-ish-video-thing: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sjlz9hb6XQ0

...So awesome O.O

The quoted passage was hard to read but I LOVED the flashing words and the music selection. Totally cool :D

[xXMkingXx]

...So awesome O.O

The quoted passage was hard to read but I LOVED the flashing words and the music selection. Totally cool :D

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. Also i finaly found something to do: Im gonna play through Half life(i can't say im a gamer if i haven't played half life :D).

[L33t B0uncer/R0sie]

Woot for the chapter

[Crazy Demon]

Half life(i can't say im a gamer if i haven't played half life

TBH, I actually bought Half-Life for Counter-Strike :X

[xXMkingXx]

What's the number of days between the chapters?

IT'S OVER 9000!!!1

Crazy are u ded, there hasn't been a chapter in 4days, I'm worried :O

Btw, i haz profile picture nauw xD

[Crazy Demon]

Crazy are u ded, there hasn't been a chapter in 4days, I'm worried :O

Lol, I think you posted the same time I did.

Next chapter coming soon wrote part of it yesterday :D

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

Everytime I see you've posted I think there is a new chapter so instead of crushing my hopes again I hearby forbid from posting in you're own thread unless it's a new chapter. Ok? good :D

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Everytime I see you've posted I think there is a new chapter so instead of crushing my hopes again I hearby forbid from posting in you're own thread unless it's a new chapter. Ok? good :D

I second that notion

[xXMkingXx]

I second that notion

i feel stupid, but was does seconing(probably spelled that wrong xD) a notion mean?

[Blade_Runner]

i feel stupid, but was does seconing(probably spelled that wrong xD) a notion mean?

lol is that Hugh Laurie?

[xXMkingXx]

lol is that Hugh Laurie?

No its, house :P(jks, i totally knew who hugh laurie is, i didn't google it at all)

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

i feel stupid, but was does seconing(probably spelled that wrong xD) a notion mean?

It basically means you support it, more or less

@BBS I like your new avatar haha

[rchris48]

and it continues to end in either:

motion carried - everyone wants it

(or)

motion denied - no one wants it

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

You can't rush great art, guys. -_-

Depends on your idea of art. What if my idea of art is splattering paint on a wall? That only takes 5 minutes haha :P

Demon, you should release shorter chapters, like I do, they're easier to work with and allow you to get a chapter out after an hour or so of beginning to work on it.

[xXMkingXx]

Depends on your idea of art. What if my idea of art is splattering paint on a wall? That only takes 5 minutes haha :P

Demon, you should release shorter chapters, like I do, they're easier to work with and allow you to get a chapter out after an hour or so of beginning to work on it.

But short chapters IMO leave the reader unsatisfied. Id rather wait a little(LITTLE) longer and get a full chapter then get a sentence everyday :P

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[domino29]

Oh mah god!!!! He's making two movies outta one book!!! NOOOOO!!!!!!!!
JK Rowling Ftf.
(For the fail, still trying to coin that.)

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Patience is a virtue, everyone. Let's not pressure Crazy Demon to the point that he pulls a J. K. Rowling on us.

I don't understand that reference haha

[xXMkingXx]

Oh mah god!!!! He's making two movies outta one book!!! NOOOOO!!!!!!!!
JK Rowling Ftf.
(For the fail, still trying to coin that.)

whats Ftf?(for the ****?)

[domino29]

For the fail, trying to popularize it, but in the case of Crazy's lack of chapters, then yes, it means For the ****.

Just looked back on Page 7 at my first post in this thread. I was on my neutral runthrough and I asked Crazy not to spoil the ending of the game. I was such a loser then :D That was like...... forever ago :P

[xXMkingXx]

For the fail, trying to popularize it, but in the case of Crazy's lack of chapters, then yes, it means For the ****.

Just looked back on Page 7 at my first post in this thread. I was on my neutral runthrough and I asked Crazy not to spoil the ending of the game. I was such a loser then :D That was like...... forever ago :P

Me to, gosh am i glad the loser days are over. Just kidding im still a loser :(

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

For the fail, trying to popularize it, but in the case of Crazy's lack of chapters, then yes, it means For the ****.

Just looked back on Page 7 at my first post in this thread. I was on my neutral runthrough and I asked Crazy not to spoil the ending of the game. I was such a loser then :D That was like...... forever ago :P

I'm too lazy to look it up haha :P

[rchris48]

Crazy, is it time yet? Soon? Maybe today? :confused:

[pikimon]

I say we start a Riot of "Moar" Example:

MOAR!!!!

[Gotz Van Buren]

Moar like this?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZcYiJDGFvMo

[xXMkingXx]

Its been a week since the last chapter!!!!1

We want MOAR!

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[xXMkingXx]

Greedy, impatient bastards, the lot of you! :D

Well that is what crazy(i still dont know if its he or she) gets for making such an amazing and addicting story.

[rchris48]

Moar like this?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZcYiJDGFvMo

The one in the middle looks like a really p*ssed off Squidward! ahahaha

[Gotz Van Buren]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sq5pwu1R-x8&feature=related

[xXMkingXx]

Since where all postin links nauw:
When i found out that there wasnt a new chapter yet i was like: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=31g0YE61PLQ

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Rawr

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xhzc8Hc9JwA

[xXMkingXx]

WTFBBQ?

-over 9000! char

[rchris48]

Rawr

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xhzc8Hc9JwA

WTF was that about?:confused:

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

WTF was that about?:confused:

Haha it's my entry to a contest. Just trying to get more views haha

[xXMkingXx]

Haha it's my entry to a contest. Just trying to get more views haha

Ha! i knew it, you dont look like sinclair at all! You profile picture is misleading.

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Ha! i knew it, you dont look like sinclair at all! You profile picture is misleading.

Haha Sinclair? You mean Mark? Haha

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[xXMkingXx]

Haha Sinclair? You mean Mark? Haha

Yeah, i was thinking about sinclair.... Sad he had to die imo, i really liked him :(

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

BLACKOUT is way better-looking than Mark! :D

Yanno it's true. :p

Haha why thank you :)

[xXMkingXx]

I think crazy is dead, now i have to die to so i can go to hell to slap him(her?) for not making a chapter for so long

[domino29]

If he (SHE!) is dead, Im going down to hell and dragging him (HER!!!! ) back here to finish.... then he (F*CKIN SHE@!?!?) can go back to hell :D

[xXMkingXx]

But srssly is crazy a he or a she. Its been ages since the last chapter(more then a week!!!1)

[pikimon]

Like I said I say we begin a Riot, preferably of the violent viariety

[xXMkingXx]

Like I said I say we begin a Riot, preferably of the violent viariety

No, we cant harm crazy(yet) if we only break his(her?) finger he already unable to write more eleanors dream.....we could cut his(her?) ear off though. Or his(her?) tounge, or his(her?) legg, his(her?) hair.

[xXMkingXx]

But really, crazy needs to end the story soon, i have done nothing but sit infront of my pc waiting for a chapter to feed my addiction. If the story is over, i can finaly go outside and see daylight again.

[Crazy Demon]

(Sorry, not an update :X)


But really, crazy needs to end the story soon, i have done nothing but sit infront of my pc waiting for a chapter to feed my addiction. If the story is over, i can finaly go outside and see daylight again.

This is what's planned
Guild Arc (3-4 chpt prob)
Search Arc (1-2?)
Plan arc (1-2?)
Execution (2-4?)
Epilogue (1, which is already typed)

[AcrylicMummy]

Im loving the story, it actually got me to go look for more. strangely enough i found this exact story on another site. if i remember correctly it only made it up to chapter 24 or 25. if its not you, then you have someone leeching off of you.

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Im loving the story, it actually got me to go look for more. strangely enough i found this exact story on another site. if i remember correctly it only made it up to chapter 24 or 25. if its not you, then you have someone leeching off of you.

Hang on, how the hell do you have zero posts?

[Gin Ichimaru]

Hang on, how the hell do you have zero posts?

omg there becoming smarter!!!!!!!!

[Eleanor-Lamb]

Hang on, how the hell do you have zero posts?

it's the Area He/she's posting on, Post's are no longer counted on the Games thread :( .

[xXMkingXx]

Im loving the story, it actually got me to go look for more. strangely enough i found this exact story on another site. if i remember correctly it only made it up to chapter 24 or 25. if its not you, then you have someone leeching off of you.

How dare they, what site u saw it on?

[Crazy Demon]

Im loving the story, it actually got me to go look for more. strangely enough i found this exact story on another site. if i remember correctly it only made it up to chapter 24 or 25. if its not you, then you have someone leeching off of you.

It's probably fanfiction.net. I do have the story posted there (link) (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5980710/1/Bioshock_3_Eleanors_Dream) but I uploaded the chapters there later than on these forums :)

[xXMkingXx]

It's probably fanfiction.net. I do have the story posted there (link) (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5980710/1/Bioshock_3_Eleanors_Dream) but I uploaded the chapters there later than on these forums :)

Oooh, alrighty then :D, btw how r u doing on the next chapter??

[AcrylicMummy]

It's probably fanfiction.net. I do have the story posted there (link) (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5980710/1/Bioshock_3_Eleanors_Dream) but I uploaded the chapters there later than on these forums :)

Yea it was fanfiction. just wanted to bring that up to make sure you knew.

[AcrylicMummy]

Hang on, how the hell do you have zero posts?

not to sure. i just made this account to bring up the fact the story was on another site.

[domino29]

Oh, well thats cool! :D I hope this doesnt get stolen, cuz if someone steals this story, they'll die, Modern Warefare 2 Airport Style.

[AcrylicMummy]

Oh, well thats cool! :D I hope this doesnt get stolen, cuz if someone steals this story, they'll die, Modern Warefare 2 Airport Style.

You wouldn't happen to be Makarov would you?

[xXMkingXx]

You wouldn't happen to be Makarov would you?

YOU wouldn't happen to be Shepherd, would you?

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

YOU wouldn't happen to be Shepherd, would you?

Shepard what a no good piece of dog **** haha

[AcrylicMummy]

YOU wouldn't happen to be Shepherd, would you?


If you happen to be Makarov, and I happen to be Shepherd then it appears we are at an impasse...

[xXMkingXx]

If you happen to be Makarov, and I happen to be Shepherd then it appears we are at an impasse...

Yes, yes indeed. There only one way to solve that.......Nuke everyone(oh wait that was a cod4 reference, oops :\).

Btw, anyone else here thinks mirror's edge is an amazing game with an even more amazing soundtrack? I just played it again(havnt played it in a while cuz it keeps crashing) and ooh god how i missed jumping over incredibly high buildings and hitting bad guys with thier own guns in the face :D

[Blade_Runner]

Yes, yes indeed. There only one way to solve that.......Nuke everyone(oh wait that was a cod4 reference, oops :\).

Btw, anyone else here thinks mirror's edge is an amazing game with an even more amazing soundtrack? I just played it again(havnt played it in a while cuz it keeps crashing) and ooh god how i missed jumping over incredibly high buildings and hitting bad guys with thier own guns in the face :D

my favurite parts are the sewer duct/underground area, and the construction building

[AcrylicMummy]

Yes, yes indeed. There only one way to solve that.......Nuke everyone(oh wait that was a cod4 reference, oops :\).

Btw, anyone else here thinks mirror's edge is an amazing game with an even more amazing soundtrack? I just played it again(havnt played it in a while cuz it keeps crashing) and ooh god how i missed jumping over incredibly high buildings and hitting bad guys with thier own guns in the face :D


it is a great game, to short though, i beat it in a few hours. favorite part is when you walk into that room and get stunned. then take out the guys with machine guns.

i dont own it though because i just borrowed it, right now im playing Red Dead Redemption and Fallout 3 (Im on my like, 10th fallout runthrough.

[domino29]

Meh, I stick to what I know mostly. I like to play high quality games, so if a game has a lot of cons (even if it's good) I still may not like it. That's what happens when I play too many quality games like Metal Gear and BioShock.

Friend says Fallout 3 is good, but finicky. Is it? Or was he just trying so that I wouldn't ask to borrow it?

Also..... perhaps I am Makarov...............

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Meh, I stick to what I know mostly. I like to play high quality games, so if a game has a lot of cons (even if it's good) I still may not like it. That's what happens when I play too many quality games like Metal Gear and BioShock.

Friend says Fallout 3 is good, but finicky. Is it? Or was he just trying so that I wouldn't ask to borrow it?

Also..... perhaps I am Makarov...............

Haha this thread is so off topic

[xXMkingXx]

my favurite parts are the sewer duct/underground area, and the construction building

I dont like the sewer part, cuz i kept failing over and over. I havnt played throught he whole game yet(cuz it still crashes) but for now my favourite parts are when you are actually on the ground where the cars and all that stuff is. you kinda have a more detailed look on the beautiful city :D

[xXMkingXx]

Haha this thread is so off topic

Well we cant really talk about the story itself cuz we dont have a new chapter :P

[themaster]

Name and shame! No seriously can't wait.:rolleyes:

[AcrylicMummy]

Meh, I stick to what I know mostly. I like to play high quality games, so if a game has a lot of cons (even if it's good) I still may not like it. That's what happens when I play too many quality games like Metal Gear and BioShock.

Friend says Fallout 3 is good, but finicky. Is it? Or was he just trying so that I wouldn't ask to borrow it?

Also..... perhaps I am Makarov...............

It CAN be finicky, but not game breaking. i play on 360 so every now and then i will have a little graphic glitch. nothing to bad though. im sure its alot better on the PC because you're able to mod... id say borrow it.

[Crazy Demon]

(A/N: I'm probably going to regret saying this...but people asking where the next chapter actually does motivate me to write >.>)

CHAPTER 30 POST #1

The journey was rather tame. Unlike other areas in Rapture, the Guild's Building was in pretty good shape. Aside from having almost no lighting at all, it was structurally sound and not in any danger of collapsing- even when hit by out-of-control bathyspheres. After leaving the ball room, the rescuers had walked down long empty hallways; though hallways weren't the correct term. Over ten feet wide, these "hallways" were clearly the public walking areas, appearing more like elongated rooms than passages.

It was actually slightly disturbing how empty the halls were- there were no corpses, no vending machines, no random garbage, nothing. Just long dark empty halls that seemed to close around you, trapping you at the bottom of the ocean..

It didn't take too long before the rescuers reached a series of rooms. It was there they encountered there first... confrontation.

"Use the pipes!"

Eleanor gave a growl of fustration. Jack was a great man...but he was using out-dated information. "No Jack! Redirecting the fluid is such an ineffecient way of hacking things! It's outdated and takes forever! You have to ride the currents!"

They were in a hopsital room which had clearly seen better days. Dozens of bent, twisted beds were packed at the end of the room, creating a makeshift metal wall. They hadn't gotten a chance to explore the area as there was a medi-station at the front entrance. Both Jack and Eleanor had decided that it was necessary to hack the device; this they both easily agreed on.

The method of hacking was a completely different story.

Jack scoffed. "Are you kidding? Not only do you have a time limit, you have to hit the right currents at the exact times! You're basically making the hacking three times as hard to save maybe one or two seconds- and if you're as good at manipulating the flow of coolant as I am, you'll actually be losing time!"

"It's not about speed!" Cried Eleanor, waving her hands around and nearly slashing Marie with her needle. "Using the hacking needle is more efficent and allows you to gain greater rewards! And you can move while manipulating the currents!"

"Umm...Why don't we just smash open the medi-station and take whatever first aid kits fall out?" Ventured Marie. She immediately backed off as both Eleanor and Jack glared at her- as if it was blasphemy to even suggest using brute force on a machine.

Eleanor took a small breath and calmed herself. "Look, just let me hack this first aid here with my method. Then, you can hack the next first aid station we find. After that, we'll decide which method is the best."

Jack shrugged. He suppose it wasn't that big of a deal and it would be interesting to see an alternative method. "Go ahead," He replied.

Eleanor flashed a smile that her helmet hid as she walked up the machine. Getting ready to hack the machine, her gloves reached out and carefully opened the machine. Her hands twitched slightly as electricity jumped from the machine and-

-jolted her awake. Eleanor made no movement to indicate she had woken. Instead, she lay back and took a deep breath, instantly recognizing the sterile smell of a medical center. The rocky, slightly-uncomfortable bed that all hospitals used only proved what Eleanor had already figured- once again, she had extended too far beyond her limits and was now in medical attention. Any second now her mother would bust into the room and scream at her for 'risking your life' and other such nonse-

Wait a minute. How did she get in a hospital? She had been testing the new diving suit, going deeper than any man had gone before! She had just discovered an entire new city before she had been hit by that...sphere. How did she get into a hospital unless...?

Ah crap, she was dead wasn't she?

"Aye, how long you plannin' to stay in bed? You haven't gone tits up on me have ya?"

Eleanor eyes snapped open at the female Austrialian voice and she sat straight up like a rod. Next to her bed sat a young woman dressed in a green pilot jump suit with aviator goggles resting snuggly on the top of her helmt. She had only a second to take in the woman's strange appearance before she felt a fist smash into her cheek, sending her spawling out of the bed. Stars seem to explode in front of her eyes and she suddenly couldn't think straight.

"Well, you're a lively topsider. Surprised me though. Sorry about that, love."

In Eleanor's opinion, the Australian woman didn't sound like she was sorry. She began blinking rapidly her eyes trying to clear her head. The strange woman simply sat in her chair watching her and made no attempt to help her up. "Aww, did the mean girl snuff you up?" The woman jeered, no doubt thinking from her rapid blinking that she was crying.

"You know, seeing that you smashed your fist into my face, you could have given me a hand," Eleanor said in a crossed-voice, as she pulled herself up.

"Hey, its you're fault for being so slow topsider. Still, you couldn't have been bested by better!"

Wow, this Australian was really arrogant wasn't she? Eleanor couldn't help but take part in the banter. "Oh I've got plenty of speed. Why don't you try punching me now that I'm ready?"

The woman gave an cocky smirk. "Fighting you would be like fighting boredom itself mate!"

Eleanor open her mouth to retort but the words died in her throat as she took in her surroundings. She wasn't in a hospital- or in any hospital she had ever seen before. It was more like a room with a bed and a couple of cabinents- the only thing that could be used to identiy this as a medical center of some kind was an odd machine attached to the far wall that had the Red Cross painted on its front.

She definitely wasn't in Kansas anymore.

"What is that thing?" Eleanor pointed at the device.

"That's a medi-station mate," The Australian replied nonchalantly. "You were as closed as you could get to dying when I brought you in. Without that little wonder miracle, you would have been a pile of jelly now. Don't worry love, you're up to full speed now!"

Eleanor suddenly remembered the circumstances that had landed her in this situation. "Where the hell am I?" Demanded Eleanor, backing away from the woman, who was still sitting in her chair. "Why do you keep calling me topsider?"

The woman smiled. "Wow, either they're making topsiders slower than ever or you're just a dumb one."

"Stop jerking me around!" Eleanor shouted. "Just tell me where I am!"

If it was possible, the woman's smile grew even wider as she uttered one word. "Rapture."

CLICK HERE FOR CHAPTER 30 POST #2 (http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1047009&postcount=943)

[xXMkingXx]

(A/N: I'm probably going to regret saying this...but people asking where the next chapter actually does motivate me to write >.>)

In that case: Where IS the next chapter?!?!??

[rchris48]

Thank you for the chapter, now may we have another STAT, PPPPLLLLLEEEAAAASSSSEEEEE!!!

[AcrylicMummy]

woot, a nice little present after working in the yard.

and yea you probably will regret saying that. bring on the spamming of the phrase "So weres the next chapter?"

And with that i leave you with a question. Were is the next chapter? :)

[xXMkingXx]

So weres the next chapter?

[Crazy Demon]

(Sorry guys, meant to post this last night but something came up :X )

CHAPTER 30 POST #2

Eleanor was pulled back to reality as the medi-center gave a loud beep and zapped her full of electricty. She hissed in pain and pulled back. The machine had shocked her for her inactivity.

"Whoops..." Eleanor quickly said before the others could say anything. "Looks like I'm a little out of practice. Let me try that again."

Marie only scoffed, ignorant to any deception. Jack had a pensive look across his face but said nothing.

Eleanor had to struggle to keep her hands steady as she went to work again. Her head felt like it was going to split in half. A wave of nasus swept over and she felt bile rise up in the back of her throat and threaten to explode. She swallowed and ignored the painful affects of her condition and began on the med-station. In only a few short seconds, the hack was complete. With a loud whirl, the hacked medi-station spat out a aid kit, that landed on the ground with a soft thud.

Jack eyes went wide. "You got a free health kit from hacking?"

"Mmmmmmmmmph!"

The muffled scream came from behind the rows of bed that lined the hospital room, warning the inhabitants they were not alone and prompting the rescuers into immediate action. All levity disappeared from Jack's face as he motioned for the two girls to take their positions. Marie moved backwards, dropping down to one knee, making herself a smaller target- with absolutely no gene tonics, Marie was the most vulnerable of the group, with only her thin human skin to protect her. She propped her crossbow on her shoulder and readied herself to shoot anything that moved.

Eleanor, on the other hand, step forward, standing straight as she made herself a bigger target. Although her fighting style focused more on speed and agility, she understood that with her armor and regeneration she was most suited for acting as the team's meatshield. Two fireballs erupted, one hovering above each hand, as she readied herself for battle.

The room was filled with tense silence as the trio waited with baited breath. There was no doubt something on the other side of the room, but the many beds piled on top of each other blocked their view and gave the unknown threat valuable cover. Recognizing this problem, Jack turned to Eleanor and whispered, "Telekinesis."

Eleanor understood immediately. She dispersed the fireball floating over her right hand while keeping her left burning. Together, she and Jack reached out with their telekinesis and in one quick movement, lifted the beds and threw them away.

The effect was instantaneous. For a split second, Eleanor saw dozens of health packs in many neatly stacked columns. These columns sat surrounding...something. It looked like some kind of mud monster but before Eleanor could get a closer look everything went to hell.

The neatly stacked columns of medikits were sent flying all over the room as the thing dashed forward in a massive gust of wind. Eleanor and Jack had barely any time to react as the dozens of medikits pelted their faces. The dirt creature dashed right between the two, slipping past them with incredible speed. The thing was far too fast before either of them could even attempt to stop him.

But not for Marie. In her protected position at the back of the room, she calmly aimed down the crossbow and pulled the trigger.

Twang!

The creature stumbled as a bolt buried deep into his thigh. It continued its stumbling charge, forcing Marie to leap out of the way.

To the trio's surprise the creature ignored Marie and dove straight for the medikit station. It grabbed the fallen medikat, wrap it's arms around it in a big bear hug and shouted, "MINE!"

The rescuer's exchanged as confused glances as they aimed their weapons at the creature. Now that the creature had stopped running she could clearly see that it was not an animal or monster in front of her but an absolutely filthy short man. He was covered from head to toe in dirt. He had only patches of dirty-brown hair on his head. His face was mangled with scars and cuts and when Eleanor looked closely, she could even see dirt buried in his cuts.

"Who are you?" Demanded Jack.

The man glared at him. "I'm the one asking the questions!" He shouted, ignoring the multiple guns and plasmids ready to eviscerate him. "Who the hell do you people think you are? You come into MY territory, hack my machines, shoot me, and worst of all, TRY TO STEAL MY MEDKITS! These are MY medkits! Not yours! Mine! Mine, mine mine!"

The rescuers exchanged a significant glance. This man clearly had a few screws loose. Not surprising considering their location.

The gears in Jack's head were already turning. He gestured to the girls to lower their weapons. As the leader of the group, he stepped forward and spoke. "We didn't know that this was your property. We wouldn't have taken anything if we had known. On behalf of my friends here, I apologize."

The man pulled the bolt out of his thigh and used the medkit in his hands to heal the wound. "Hmph. You should have known. Still, I'm glad I don't have to kill you. Too much killing in this place. Everything would be much better if we just got along."

Jack nodded- he understood that sentiment completely. "You're right. So let's settle this without violence. We don't want to take any of your stuff. We're just looking for someone in this city. Maybe you can help us?"

The man scowled. "This is bad business son! Everyone knows you can't make a deal without introducing yourself! You can't rush these things!"

Jack raised an eyebrow at the sudden switch but humored in the man. "Very well. My name is Jack. My companions are Eleanor and Marie. What is your name?"

The man scowled even further. "What? Who do you think you are asking for my name? That's valuable information son!"

Marie's eye twitched as her hand slowly drifted back to her crossbow. Jack shot a warning look before turning to the man. "Look, you don't have to tell me your name. All we're looking for is any information that might help us find the person we're looking for. The sooner we get this, the sooner we can get out of your hair and leave your territory. Okay?"

The man sighed in annoyance. "Didn't I just say that? I don't have all day, so hurry up and ask away."

Marie gave a growl that sent waves of amusement in both Eleanor and Delta. Jack ignored them all as he dove straight into business. "We're looking for Brigid Tenebaum. Do you know her?"

CLICK HERE FOR CHAPTER 30 POST #3 (http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1055493&postcount=967)

[themaster]

BRIGID Tenenbaum, not like Doc's username.

Aside from that, one of your best chapter's yet. Good work!

[Crazy Demon]

BRIGID Tenenbaum, not like Doc's username.

Oh, that was um... a cameo appearance! Believe it!

>.>

Yeah, changed :X. Thanks for the catch

[xXMkingXx]

Ooooh, are we gonna see more of this filthy guy? He seems like a nice guy :D, great chapter btw(as expected).

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[AcrylicMummy]

woot. i love it when i wake up and i find a new chapter.

[xXMkingXx]

you wake up at 4.45pm!?!?!?!?

[Ryan's number 1 fan]

you wake up at 4.45pm!?!?!?!?

-_-

Not everyone lives in the same timezone

[AcrylicMummy]

you wake up at 4.45pm!?!?!?!?


haha i have once. but no if it says i posted at 4:45 then its because i never set my time zone right. i made this account to keep tabs and comment on this story, so i just ignored the time zone

[xXMkingXx]

haha i have once. but no if it says i posted at 4:45 then its because i never set my time zone right. i made this account to keep tabs and comment on this story, so i just ignored the time zone

Same :D, i never really do anything else on these forums :P

[AcrylicMummy]

am i the only one who repeatedly checks this forum for a new chapter? i swear i check like, every hour. also, just thought of something. how come that dirt covered guy didn't freak out when he saw eleanor in her big sister suit. was he just to crazy to care?

[xXMkingXx]

am i the only one who repeatedly checks this forum for a new chapter? i swear i check like, every hour. also, just thought of something. how come that dirt covered guy didn't freak out when he saw eleanor in her big sister suit. was he just to crazy to care?

No, always when i start up firefox(which is like 50times a day) i always check my youtube, email and this thread if there is anything new :D

[rchris48]

No, always when i start up firefox(which is like 50times a day) i always check my youtube, email and this thread if there is anything new :D

When I get into work I turn on the computer, throw down some scalding hot tea and check this thread for new chapters. Then check again after lunch and again before I leave for the night.

[AcrylicMummy]

When I get into work I turn on the computer, throw down some scalding hot tea and check this thread for new chapters. Then check again after lunch and again before I leave for the night.

I wake up and check, have breakfast, check, take a shower and play some xbox, check, go out and look for a job, check. etc etc etc.

actually re-reading this i just realized how badly i need a job...

[rchris48]

e.g. the after lunch check - No new chapters - CHECK! :(

[Daddy Is Strong!]

YAY! he lives! :rolleyes:

Where is the next chapter? where is the next chapter?? WHERE IS THE NEXT CHAPTER!???

Motivating eh?

[AcrylicMummy]

so much for "Next part up later tonight - for real this time" lol. makes me sad = [ i tried to write my own story... GOD It is terrible. i got one chapter done and was like. "LOL. FAIL." its now sitting on my desktop taunting me.

so anyway new chapter?

oh and please dont take this as a add for my story, im not planning on putting it online and i don't want people to think im trying to leech. only reason i brought it up was because this story kinda gave the me idea for the whole thing. so yea. new chap?

[xXMkingXx]

I can haz new chapteh?

[Big Bad Sister]

EDIT: Ignore, please.

[xXMkingXx]

I could say i do this to motivate him(her?). But i'd be lying. I totally am THAT impatient with crazy.

[Gin Ichimaru]

I could say i do this to motivate him(her?). But i'd be lying. I totally am THAT impatient with crazy.

i cant stay silent any longer:( your avetar is creepy:eek:

[xXMkingXx]

i cant stay silent any longer:( your avetar is creepy:eek:

How is it creepy? I think it is very amusing(srsly, i laugh everytime i look at it).

[Gin Ichimaru]

How is it creepy? I think it is very amusing(srsly, i laugh everytime i look at it).

sorry it just seems creepy to me:(

[AcrylicMummy]

Are you folks really that impatient with Crazy Demon? :rolleyes: :cool:

not really that impatient. i just like saying "New chap?"

[Crazy Demon]

(A/N: /Embarassed. Sorry guys, with college starting up again I've been pretty busy.)

CHAPTER 30 POST #3

"Eh? That German scientist who made them little sisters? Rapture's finest?" Jack and Marie eagerly nodded. "Nope, don't know her."

Jack's body seem to deflate. "What do you mean?"

The man crossed his arms and stuck his nose up in the air. "I know ABOUT her, but I don't actually know her."

Jack took a deep breath, reaching into his large pool of patience. "Well, we're looking for her now, so do you know where she is?"

"Nope. Far as I know, she left this place eight years ago and never came back."

"Oh she's definitely back," Eleanor interjected as Jack and Marie glanced at her. She didn't want them to think she was lying to them. "You've been here for God knows how long. Makes sense you wouldn't know about what's going on in the rest of the city."

Once again the man defied expectations. Instead of getting angry, he merely gave a booming laugh. "That's right Eleanor. Lamb never could reach her claws into MY territory. What goes on in the rest of the city is none of my concern."

Eleanor felt a shiver go her spine as the man gave a knowing look at her. It was as if he knew exactly who she was despite the Big Sister armor.

The fact that he knew she was Eleanor, not Marie only compounded that fact.

Jack took advantage of the silence to jump in. "Do you know how to get to the main city?"

"I sure do," The man said scratching his belly. "I have a private bathysphere in my apartment that could take me anywhere I wanted in the city...or at least it use to before Lamb blocked off all access but it looks like you already got that part covered. " The man glanced at the Eleanor in her Big Sister armored suit before looking at Jack again. " 'Course, no one can get in the apartment except for me..."

The man trailed off, giving them a significant look. Jack gave another sigh and went straight to business. "What do you want?"

"Nothing that wouldn't inconvenience you too much," The man leaned back against the wall and propped his arm on top of the medistation. "You see, I'm not too popular around in this part. This place is my territory but I had to step on a lot of toes to get it. Since I'm a pacifist it's been...hard for me to move about."

"What does being a pacifist have anything to do with that?" Interrupted Marie.

Eleanor rolled her eyes from inside her helmet. What a naive and foolish girl. Down in Rapture, swearing not to hurt anyone didn't make you harmless, it made you more of a target- it made you look like a weak and easy take.

The man grimaced. "Well, before I became a pacifist, I was a bit psychotic. I was greedy and wanted everything. And I didn't let anyone stand in my way. When the civil war broke out and that damn Sinclair started giving out rewards for testing his weapons, I went on a bit of a killing spree."

The man paused a regretful look on his face taking hold of his face. "For the next six years."

"But I've turned a new leaf now!" The man quickly interjected. "I'm a pacifist now!"

Eleanor cast a critical eye on the man. "A pacifist in Rapture? That can't be working out well for you."

The man scratched the back of his with a downcast look upon his face. "It was alright at first- everyone just left me alone because my reputation was so...fierce. But now that I haven't killed or hurt anyone, everyone is breaching my territory and trying to kill me."

His face twisted with sorrow. "And I definitely deserve it. All those people I killed...all in the name of Sinclair's damn research..."

At the back of her head, Eleanor felt Delta give the mental equivalent of an awkward squirm. She couldn't blame him- although Sinclair had helped them greatly in their escape, he was still a greedy man at heart. He had hurt a lot of people, both intentionally and accidental.

The man suddenly smiled widely, the dirt on his face stretching out. "And that's why I need your help. It's too dangerous out here. Escort me back to my apartment and I'll let you have my bathysphere."

Jack nodded in agreement despite not having a choice in the matter. He extended his hand. "Very well. Lead the way and we will protect you."

The man extended his hand and shook it. "Excellent! Let's go. The sooner we get this over with, the better off we all are."

CLICK HERE FOR CHAPTER 31 (POST #1) (http://forums.2kgames.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1203347&postcount=1118)

[themaster]

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!

You never fail to deliver, Demon. NEVER.

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

I feel sad for that guy

[Blade_Runner]

nicely done

[xXMkingXx]

I feel sad for that guy

Same. Crazy, plz tell me he is gonna live :D(im still mad at you for killing the appeltons >:( )

[domino29]

I like him! :D

Can he die in a hail of bullets and ice, electricity, and bees?

[Crazy Demon]

I feel sad for that guy

I like him!

Same. Crazy, plz tell me he is gonna live :D

Hehe, these quotes makes me laugh since I know the true identity of "The Man" ;)

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Hehe, these quotes makes me laugh since I know the true identity of "The Man" ;)

OMG. It's Delta. No way!

Or...could it be? Is it Cohen?

I doubt it though; he didn't do anything like this guy did to my knowledge

[Crazy Demon]

I doubt anyone will be able to guess it yet since I haven't left any real clues as to the Man's identity. Though its not really relevant to the story.

[themaster]

I doubt anyone will be able to guess it yet since I haven't left any real clues as to the Man's identity. Though its not really relevant to the story.

Buck Raleigh!

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

Oh! I got it!

It's Jack!

Oh wait...

[Kyntak]

It's Meltzer isn't it?

[AcrylicMummy]

its obviously santa claus...

[Kyntak]

If this sentence is true, then Mark Meltzer is the strange man in the previous chapter. (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Curry's_paradox)

You can't deny that :p

[Blade_Runner]

I doubt anyone will be able to guess it yet since I haven't left any real clues as to the Man's identity. Though its not really relevant to the story.

im going to say...Sullivan

[Pentrage]

...........

[Gin Ichimaru]

the fisher charicter from MP (cant rember his name)

[xXMkingXx]

It's pretty obvious that it is chuck norris being all undercover to punch the **** out of all the splicers.

[AcrylicMummy]

It's pretty obvious that it is chuck norris being all undercover to punch the **** out of all the splicers.

you dont know? chuck norris is really just clint eastwood in disguise.

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

you dont know? chuck norris is really just clint eastwood in disguise.

Dude...I finally figured out why you have zero posts!

You're only posting in forum games

[xXMkingXx]

Dude...I finally figured out why you have zero posts!

You're only posting in forum games

Am i having a deja-vu(again) or didn't someone already said that?!?

Anyways, thats the same reason i got 28posts. I should have a lot more >:(

[Pentrage]

Am i having a deja-vu(again) or didn't someone already said that?!?

Anyways, thats the same reason i got 28posts. I should have a lot more >:(

Naw man, it's probably just "DO WANT house" scaring your posts away

[AcrylicMummy]

yea i seem to remember this convo happening already as well. and i have a terrible memory.

[rchris48]

I really, really, really want it to be Sander but he's all dirty. Sander was spotlessly clean.....Frank???? Frank is a master con artist. Maybe Frank. I hate the guy but I would be on his team if my survival was at stake....that man is an opportunist to the extreme.

[xXMkingXx]

Like oh my GAWD! We are almost at the hundred'st page of this thread :D

[xXMkingXx]

Oh my GAWD! Just noticed that we ARE on the 100's page :D

[AcrylicMummy]

so im kinda in the mood for a new chapter.... but there isnt one up.

[L33t B0uncer/R0sie]

The ghost of Agent Roddenberry demands you to stop complaining!!!! :mad:

[X1 BLACKOUT 1X]

The ghost of Agent Roddenberry demands you to stop complaining!!!! :mad:

Lol seriously. Give Demon a break

[AcrylicMummy]

hey im not complanin im just saying i cant wait for a new chap. besides now that schools started up again (SENIOR YEAR WOOT) i have stuff to do to keep me occupied (Hurrah for Russian)

[domino29]

Oh my Gawrf!!!!

I come back after a week, and NO CHAPTERS!!!!!
How many times do we have to beg for moar?

[Gin Ichimaru]

hey while your waiting you can read my fanfic:D i promis some checked it ovrt:cool:

[AcrylicMummy]

nah im good, i have a butt load of Russian homework to keep me occupied now -_-

[Gin Ichimaru]

nah im good, i have a butt load of Russian homework to keep me occupied now -_-
good luck with that